My Kohl-eyed*, daily dose of alluring quicksand,
breezes in with a whiff of petrichor
A billion bouncing twirling symphonies
surround me,
juxtaposed with a generous sprinkling of nebulous rainbows-

A bubblegum goes ‘Pop’. I surface.
‘One coffee, please’. Arrivederci.

*Kohl (Arabic: كُحْل ) is an ancient eye cosmetic, traditionally made by grinding stibnite for similar purposes to charcoal used in mascara.

Breathing In The Morning – #YeahWrite #FunWithWords
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4 thoughts on “Breathing In The Morning – #YeahWrite #FunWithWords

  • April 3, 2018 at 10:08 pm
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    The insecurity that women face is a real thing. We may send our daughters to self defense classes but it’s time we send our sons to some humane conditioning classes as well. Both of them need to change the way they are living. And who is going to do that? We… Parents. Change starts with us and today. Let’s. Make our contribution to a better society. However small.
    Mann💓
    #superbloggerchallenge2018

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  • March 25, 2018 at 9:25 pm
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    I think the setting is getting a little lost. Maybe inserting “the cafe” or something like it after “breezes in” will give readers a little more context and help them appreciate the meaning of “alluring quicksand.”

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    • March 25, 2018 at 9:50 pm
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      Yes. I was wondering how I can tweak it to convey the setting better

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